Section 3 Local RevisionsLanguage and style（第1页）

Se3:LocalRevisions（Layle）

Localrevisionsaimatrefiningthelayleiomakeyourworkmorepleasahisrequiresagreatdealofpatiendacayhavetoreviseessaysseveraltimesbeforeyoudecidethattheyaresatisfaeetalltherequirementsdefinedbyyourstructor。

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Prmeansexaminicarefullytofindaypographiistakesingrammar，style，andspelling。Mostpeopledevoteoest，hopingtoyglarihatjumpoutfromthepage。Butaquidcurs，especiallyafteryou’vebeenwandhardonapaper，usuallymissesalot。Itisbettertoworkwithadefihathelpsyoutosearchsystematicallyforspedsoferrors。

Hereissomeadviyadvice:

·Doirelyonspellihesebeusefultoolsbuttheyarefarfromfoolproof。Spellcheckershavealimiteddiary，sosomeasmisspelledmayreallyjustheirmemory。Inaddition，spellcheckerswillnotcatchmisspellingsthatformanothervalidword。Forexample，ifyoutype“your”insteadof“you’re”“to”ioo”or“there”iheir”thespellche’tcatchtheerror。

·Grammarchebeevenmoreproblematic。Theseprogramsworkwithalimitednumberofrules，sotheyotidentifyeveryerrorandofteakes。Theyalsofailtogivethhexplanationstohelpyouuandwhyasentenceshouldberevised。Youmaywanttouseagrammarcheckertohelpyouideialruoo-frequehepassivevoice，butyouoevaluatethefeedbackitprovides。

·Readslowly，andreadeverywoutloud，whichforcesyoutosayeadalsoletsyouhearhowthewordssouher。Whelyortooquiayskipovererrorsormakeunsciouss。

·Circleeverypunark。Thisforcesyoutolookateae。Asyoucircle，askyourselfifthepuniscorrect。

&hepaperbackwards。Thisteiqueishelpfulfspelling。Startwiththelastwordopageandworkyourwaybacktothebeginning，readingeachwordseparately。Betent，pun，andgrammarwon’tmakeanysense，yourfocuswillbeehespellingofeachword。Youalsoreadbackwardsseeocheckgrammar;thiswillhelpyouavoidbeingdistractedbytissues。

·Ignorancemaybebliss，butitwillnotmakeyouabetterproofreader。Youwilloftenfindthingsthatdoerighttoyou，butyoumayesurewhatiswroher。Awordlookslikeitmightbemisspelled，butthespellche’tcatchit。Youthinkyouneedaabetords，butyou’renotsurewhy。Shouldyouuse“that”insteadof“which”?Ifyou’resomething，lookitup。

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Activity3-1:Aprpractice

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2。Revisiencesforvarietyandstyle

a。Revisiencesforvariety

&yiseasytnizeameansamixturethatisnotmonotonous。Style，oherhand，isopinpoint。Itspresenapieceisunmistakablebutnotshowy。Liketact，styleisspiitsabseleinitspresence。Apassagethatmonotohesamekiendainisnot，itisalsowithoutstyle。

&liketobegiwosentenarowwiththesameword;aliketoehaenarowwiththesameword，either。Ouraimistowriteasuofsedofromacookiecutter。Ifyoufindyourselfusiehesamekindinarow，gobaaterialahemforthesakeofvariety。

Activity3-2:gsentencesforvariety

Thefollraphreadsalittlemonotonousiyle。Couldyourevisethesesentencesforvariety?

&ryisregardedbymaliteraryartform。Poetryisseennoopularform。Poetryusedtobereadverywidelybythemiddleclasses。Perenjoysthatdistindtodayishardlyreadbyanyone。

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b。Revisieyle

Researchpapersusuallyainlyofinformationfoundinbooks，periodidothersourcesthatyoui。Therefore，aquestionyoushouldbearinmindis:Whatisthetoneor“voitheessay?Doesitfeelnatural?

Activity3-3:Usinganappropriatepointofview

parethefollowingtwostatements。Whiedoyouthinkismoreappropriateintheacademig?Why?

（1）InmyreseardthatthemativecriticismofJeffersonDavisplacesthefullweightoftheSoutheronhishead。